Critique my Business Card Design

[Klasse Act]

I'm no marketing expert and don't want this to come off wrong but just being honest. The car on the card with the DUBS will turn off a certain demografic for sure. Think of it like this, a nice, clean Audi S4 in stock trim will not offend or make anyone think about the clients coming to your business but one with chrome DUBS might, again, just sayin'. Not that you did this in your add but another thing that bugs me is when the business is mispelled to sound cool, like SOUNDZ-N-SKILLZ for insance. Sure you do sound systems and have skill to do the job but its a turn off to the majority out there and when you think about it, you want to attract everyone, right?

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[arjo.reich]

Minor tweak that might not be possible without access to the vehicle but either graphically tint out the windows or take another picture because the first thing my eye was drawn to was the other car in the rear windows...

Lucky Joe,
Wannabe Detailer

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[abqhudson]

I would repeat "Deep Clean Detailing" on the back.

[OCDetailer]

I'd personally ditch the car altogether. If this is your business, invest a bit of money to a professional logo and slap that on the card. Your car, even though you love it, will not necessarily interest or impress everyone.

I would also remove the services you offer on the card as it clutters it up. All a business card really needs is:

Company name
Company logo
Your full name
Your company's address
Your phone number
Your email address
Company website

[rmagnus]

Thanks for the feedback guys, I really appreciate it! I've made some revisions, and have come up with 2 different potential designs. Both have eliminated the unattractive surroundings from around the car, and changed the text(besides company name) to a more standard font. The only difference between them is the background and text color. Any thoughts on these new drafts?

Okay that's a huge turn around. Looks great and easy to read. I'd say you took full advantage of the help here.

[FUNX650]

FWIW, here is my card. I know a lot of people aren't fans of my "monkey" guy,

I'm sure the OP appreciates your input/critique on his Business Cards...But:

The very instant I would see (hopefully it won't ever touch me) your "monkey" guy card...
It would:
1.) "end up in the trash anyway".

2.) Evoke, at the very least: A look of derision/a guttural-growl: sounding as though
it was born in the fiery-pits of Hades

3.) Maybe be the causation of a display of someone's emotional distress

...but I'm using it as a branding technique, so when
you see him, you know where it's from.

-After years of many concerted efforts by Professional Detailers to rid the general populace of their beliefs,
and all of the negative connotations, that detailers are merely: Car-wash-guys, glorified shoe-shine-boys,
hacks working for some wine-money...Lower than whale $h!t...

-You now come along, trying to pass-off these "Business" Cards as a sincere media-source..."Business" Cards
that you assume will be conducive for attracting new-numbers for a customer-base.

Tarnation/D@mn@t!on...This guy's in my neighborhood?!?!


You're correct about:

so when you see him, you know where it's from.

But don't ever be surprised to hear:

Yea, that's him alright...Not in our neighborhood!! (Call the poepoe!!)




Bob


NOTE @ OP:
Your revisions to/on your Business Card were very beneficial!!

[HeavyD]

LMAO Im glad someone else was thinking what I was thinking. Oh man,that was a classic.Im removing the Audi R8 pic I recently detailed and replacing it with your post Bob. To the OP, I did not offer much in the commentary of your business card. I liked it. Your revisions made it real good. Simple and to the point. I like that. Most customers do not want to read a book, your work should reflect what you do. Simple but elegant cards (and good referals) will get their rides to you. My 2 cents. I am on version 2 of my business cards and in business for 25 years. No complaints.

[Pureshine]

I'd personally ditch the car altogether. If this is your business, invest a bit of money to a professional logo and slap that on the card. Your car, even though you love it, will not necessarily interest or impress everyone.

I would also remove the services you offer on the card as it clutters it up. All a business card really needs is:

Company name
Company logo
Your full name
Your company's address
Your phone number
Your email address
Company website

I agree 100% with this!

[Blackthorn One]

Your revisions have improved it, but I still see the other car in the drivers side windows, and honestly, I don't think the cost of printing the car on the card will be worth it. It uses a lot of space on the card that could be used to make the lettering larger and therefore easier to read.

Putting a car on the card is an ok idea, but I think it should be smaller.
I also agree that you should put the kind of car on the card that will attract the clientele you desire. Maybe an Aston Martin DB9 in stock trim?

[Klasse Act]

I like to follow this policy:

K.I.S.S. Keep It Simple Stupid or less is more.

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