Thank you everyone for your help.
@Paul - I get where your coming from and just like fellow member Eandras said, I didn't post all my info. You can't bull figures and if you try when they're grilling you they'll figure that out alot faster than some would think. My figures, profit predictions, etc... are all there and as concrete as predictions can be along with the necessary info to back it up.
I posted everything else for help in wording and to get feedback on the summaries which again, Eandras helped me with those and my figures as well.
@Eandras - I got it, I've gone through your suggestions and I made the corrections you recommended with the exception of training. I already have two helpers that know the ins and outs almost as well as I do so the training will be minimum at best. But I did add the info of the equipment I do have which I already had saved so that was quick n easy lol. I owe you big.
I did come upon another problem, I recently(today) found out that my business name may already be registered and that I may need to find another name. Not too happy about that but I'm trying to find out if its a yes or no. Anyone got some suggestions, I was considering Merrimack Valley Auto Detailing but it seems a little long.